6th graders commenting on student work

Continuing the work of my students to try and integrate 21st century skills into the reading classroom I wanted to have student comment on other student's work.  I did this through a reading strategy we typically cover call "Reading a Graph."

Please, comment on how students did commenting on their peers work.  Give them tips, help us grow in our 21st century skills.

Lesson Plan

• Introduce reading a graph
• Practice reading a graph
• Give feedback on student performance
• Search and find graphs online that students can relate to
• Have students publicly document what they learned from the graph itself (reading strategy)
• Teach students how to comment and what make a "good" comment
• Allow time for students to comment on student work.

Setup

• Shared Google doc with student space: http://goo.gl/JinTG
• Teach how to copy and paste location of images
• Teach how to access google document
• Download and copy commenting rubric: http://edorigami.edublogs.org/2009/12/15/new-rubric-blog-commenting/

Evidence of student work

Student name:	Gabi
Graph URL:	http://www.inmycommunity.com.au/_uploads/images/myblogs/funny_statistics_04.jpg
What did I learn:	When you tell your friend there breath stinks most people breath in your face more.
Comment/By whom?	Good job, this is a vary funny graph and that most people breath in your face if you tell them there breath stinks. Ivan
Comment/By whom?	Hey Gabi! I like your graph. It’s a fun way to know strange things like that. Here are some more graphs like that (click the link). http://www.coolcrack.com/2010/05/funny-graphs-and-charts-35-pics_05.html - Bridget

Student name:	Ivan
Graph URL:	http://www.ski-injury.com/uploads/fck/image/stats1%20page/alp%20inj.jpg
What did I learn:	what part of the body someone gets hurt and how many people hurt that part of there body in skiing
Comment/By whom?	avery:: I like your graph. I did something simalar to yours. check mine out!http://www.theskateproject.org/media/extra/sporting-injuries-compari
Comment/By whom?	I really like this ivan because of how it really show’s what injury’s happen in the type of sports like skiing cause that is a really dangerous sport. -james

Student name:	Katie
Graph URL:	http://www.who.int/entity/tobacco/mpower/mpower_graph_p9.gif
What did I learn:	I learned what the top ways that people die are.
Comment/By whom?	Katie, I like your graph. It’s interesting to see that tobacco really IS bad for us. Here’s a link to Unusual Ways People die.   http://library.thinkquest.org/16665/ways.htm - Bridget
Comment/By whom?	Katie that is very bad that tobacco takes a chunk of 6 out of 8 leading killer diseases are in tobacco. My grandpa smoked for 42 years or 35 I can’t remember but then my grandpa quit & got on the plane to visit me but then he died of lung cancer Kennan.  http://www.sierraexpressmedia.com/archives/9101

	Naomi
Graph URL:	http://illuminations.nctm.org/LessonDetail.aspx?ID=L112
What did I learn:	that black is the most popular hair color and red is the last popular hair color
Comment/By whom?	I think blond hair and black hair would be a very popular hair color but I think that something like purple or green would have a lower percentage than red. I think it’s too bad those colors aren’t on the graph. -Alison
Comment/By whom?	I agree because lots of people like to have blond hair but then i would also think that different colors of hair would be a popular color like purple or green because it’s a different way to express them selves in lots of different ways. -James

	Pieter
Graph URL:	rickrolling.com_uv_460.png
What did I learn:	Hi Mr. Mcgee, In this graph it told me about the number of people that got rickroll’d in late 2009 and early 2010.  In december 09 only around 100 people got rickrolled and in mid april 2010, 4 thousand people got rickroll’d
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Student name:	James C.
Graph URL:	http://images.dailyme.com/assets/2010101400001718.jpg
What did I learn:	I learned that 75% of teachers allow there kid’s to have cell phones while in class. I also learned that 81% of teachers do not allow cell phones while in class but are aloud to bring them. lastly i learned 43% of kid’s make and revive calls in class as well as texting. I think we should really put a stop to this and teach kids not to text but pay attetion.
Comment/By whom?	I leave my phone in my pocket all the time, but i rarely text during class. I do agree that kids should pay more attention. Link to how many kids have cell phones age 6-11 link right there---->http://media.bestofmicro.com/children-cell-phone-chart,M-I-236682-13.gif-Kaleb
Comment/By whom?	I am very surprised that only 24% cant have a cell phone at all in school. I thought more schools would not allow them. It reminded me of the infograph we read at the begining of the quarter. I found that pretty cool and interesting. Thanks for sharing. Gabi

Student name:	Gillian
Graph URL:	http://www.censusatschool.ca/02/img/02_015c-eng.jpg
What did I learn:	In this graph I learned how kids get to school and what was the number one transportation.
Comment/By whom?	Gillian: That is really cool. I ride the bus so it is easy for me to understand why that one has the most amount of people going to school. I don’t understand the fact that more people don’t drive to school.
Comment/By whom?	It’s very interesting how more people get to school by a bus than any over way listed. I never knew that. Looks like I learned something today. -Isaac

Student name:	Carlow
Graph URL:	http://www.storytime.org.nz/images/booksissued_graph.gif
What did I learn:	It tells me about the amount of books issued each year.
Comment/By whom?	hey Carlow it is Naomi. i like your graph. your graph reminds me that i love books. Once i read 93 books in one summer. here is a link to another graph like yours. http://www.artdiamondblog.com/archives/2007/05/post_187.html
Comment/By whom?	I thought that it was interesting that around 3,000 books are issued in 2006.   -Katie heres another book graph http://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff288/forwardmarch/JPEG2/funny-graphs-book-requests.jpg

Student name:	Kaleb
Graph URL:	http://inmycommunity.com.au/_uploads/images/myblogs/funny_statistics_14.jpg
What did I learn:	I’m not the only one who stares at the toaster waiting for it to pop.
Comment/By whom?	I learned that really everybody just sits and waits for their toast I also found a good graph http://t1.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:-AKpB4UZKY78kM:https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/img/b/R29vZ2xl/AVvXsEjENQoku4zDZRvYinuAQn306_HRxmDv1PqxUwrjx0A4s7pMap4hR-MtrCj9lFQyp6VuIaVzSJWGNigXfJSMs1j6rj6UWoUk4TKpOsbchVX4M3ZlKdaDparFw-85HpN1r9Gfg8Cm3Bj8NBc/s400/song-chart-memes-heat-toast.jpg&t=1 -Lauryn
Comment/By whom?	Kaleb: That was really cool. I thought that I was the only person that stared at the toaster.  I learned that most people just wait for thier toast to pop. -Carlow

Student name:	Alison
Graph URL:	http://www.clearpointenglish.co.uk/Describing%20graphs_clip_image002.gif
What did I learn:	Native Americans make 7.9% of homeless.
Comment/By whom?	I really liked the graph and i learned a lot from it. Is that out of 100%? If so, I would of guessed they would have a lower percent. -Izzy http://www.ehow.com/about_4587161_american-homelessness.html
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Student name:	Tyler
Graph URL:	potatobar.jpg
What did I learn:	I learned that most kids eat french fries instead of anything else that you can make out of patatos and the least amount of kids eat baked patatos
Comment/By whom?	Tyler That is interesting because I love baked potatoes and mashed potatoes. I think I like them better than fries but I still love fries. It is a very interesting for me to know because potatoes are my favorite food. Thanks for sharing. Gabi B
Comment/By whom?	Good job Tyler that is a vary interesting graph , and this proves that people eat way to much french fries and should cut back on them and eat more healthy things, I myself do not like french fries because they are to salty.    Ivan

Student name:	Carter
Graph URL:	http://dailyhomerenotips.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/01/electricity-graph.jpg
What did I learn:	We use the most Electricity in January, July, and August and the last amount of energy was from Dec.to Apr.
Comment/By whom?	That’s interesting  i guess it’s because some people use gas to warm their houses. I wonder what the chart would be like just for my house.-Kaleb
Comment/By whom?	I thought that it was interesting that electricity is mostly used in July. Maybe it is because there is no school and kids use allot of electricity.  -Katie. I thought in Jan people would use alot of electricity because they need to heat their home because it’s freazing in Jan. Kennan Kolenda.http://www.advancedenergy.org/progressenergy/chillers_op_usage.html

Student name:	Kevin
Graph URL:	http://www.pinellascounty.org/animalservices/bites.htm
What did I learn:	Approximately 70 percent of all dog bites involve children. Almost 50 percent of all children are bitten by age 18.
Comment/By whom?	In your graph when it said 585,000 dog bite wounds require medical care each year I was really surprised. I didn’t think that dog bites even required hospital attention let alone 585,000. Thanks Kevin for showing me this interesting information. -Izzy http://www.dogbitelaw.com/PAGES/danger.htm#Proceedings%20involving%20potentially%20dangerous%20and%20vicious%20dogs
Comment/By whom?	I strongly disagree that dogs bite more than cats because i’ve been bitten by my cat like 1000 times and so yeah. ~ Jimmy

Student name:	James K.
Graph URL:	http://www.phac-aspc.gc.ca/dca-dea/7-18yrs-ans/gfx/bully1-eng.gif
What did I learn:	I learned that boys bully more than girls do.
Comment/By whom?	it is Naomi its strange to think that boys bully more then girls. because i bully my brother all the time. so i really don’t think that that is true, but i like it. we are in 6th grade and it is about the same. so if i bully someone here(which i won’t) that number will change.
Comment/By whom?	This is Gillian and i can not believe that boys bully more because i have seen more girls bully than boys in middle school.

Student name:	Bridget
Graph URL:	http://www.inmycommunity.com.au/_uploads/images/myblogs/funny_statistics_07.jpg
What did I learn:	I learned that out of all the time you use to eat an orange, you use more than half of that time to prepare it so you can actually eat it.
Comment/By whom?	Wow that’s crazy, except my brothers tack way longer pealing, don’t pick off the white stuff and scarf it down in about 5 seconds. ~Sabrina here is how to peel a orange video. http://www.howcast.com/videos/391418-How-To-Peel-an-Orange       ~Sabrina
Comment/By whom?	I think it is funny that you take more time peeling a Orange than you do eating it. If I was you ,I would just eat Mandarin Oranges already peeled because they taste the same as Oranges and you can spend more time eating than peeling. ~ Jimmy

I learned the leading causes of death for children ages 1-14 years of age. The leading cause is unintentional injury.

Student name:	Avery
Graph URL:	http://www.theskateproject.org/media/extra/sporting-injuries-comparison.jpg
What did I learn:	I learned what sports you get injured the most
Comment/By whom?	you should include what sport it is. but thats cool any way.=) from scott.
Comment/By whom?	It scares me that injuries are more likely in basketball than in any other sport considering that is my main sport. I also noticed that even though there is no contact in running/jogging that is the second most likely sport to get hurt http://www.child-psych.org/wp-content/uploads/2010/09/8_indiCapture.jpg I also found a graph about concussion. -Lauryn

Student name:	Lauryn
Graph URL:	http://whosright.com/uploads/sQE5PQ_miami_heat_graphs_05.jpg
What did I learn:	I learned that almost half the people around the world think that the Heat is more Dwayne Wade’s team than Lebron James’. Also 17% of the world think it is Chris Bosh,Lebron James, and Dwayne Wade’s team.
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	Isaac
Graph URL:	://mchb.hrsa.gov/mchihttprc/chusa_05/healthstat/children/graphs/0315cmH.gif
What did I learn:
Comment/By whom?	Isaac is strange that 10.6 children get a(n) unintentional injury from the year 1-4 and 6.3 from the years 5-14 Carter I.
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Student name:	Scott
Graph URL:	http://www.ibiblio.org/vincentweb/slides/slidesB/slide41.gif
What did I learn:	most deaths are unintentional.
Comment/By whom?	avery I think your graph was instesting I was surprized that 500.000 people die each year because of suicide.
Comment/By whom?	That is weird how there are more unintentional than homicide deaths. And that there are more suicides than homicide, I thought that there were more homicide deaths than suicide and unintentional combined. Carter I.

Student name:	Izzy
Graph URL:	http://www.csus.edu/atcs/images/childchart.gif
What did I learn:	I learned that the average weight for a 12 year old is 82 pounds.
Comment/By whom?	I’m 12 and I think I’m a little over that. But not by much. ~Miranda Hi it is gillian and i can not believe that the weight of an 6 year old is 45 pounds. I think I might do some research.
Comment/By whom?	My little brother is 5 and he is definitely more then 45 pounds. ~ Sabrina

Student name:	Sabrina
Graph URL:	http://blogs.sas.com/jmp/uploads/food.JPG
What did I learn:	I learned protean is usually a subside.
Comment/By whom?	My mom makes chicken sometimes, but it is a subside. Same with the veggies. ~Miranda
Comment/By whom?	I thought that graph was very interesting. It showed me a lot,and now I know that Protien is mostly a subside. I think you did great and keep up the good work! Tyler Hawkins here’s some more stuff about protien.

Student name:	Miranda
Graph URL:	http://scienceblogs.com/cognitivedaily/2008/10/27/zimmerman1.gif
What did I learn:	I learned that 0-36 months old, kids watch violent shows.
Comment/By whom?	that is very supprising.from scott
Comment/By whom?	That’s strange since they are only 3 years at oldest. I guess that’s where my cousin got such a bad mouth since he watches a lot of TV. -Alison http://www.turnoffyourtv.com/healtheducation/violencechildren/violencechildren.html

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